雅思翻译练习:同题PK,名师评分

考研 Freekaoyan.com/2008-04-06

第一句： 如今，老年人日益增多的现象已经引起了人们的广泛关注。

5号的翻译： Currently, the phenomenon that there are increasing senior citizens has aroused the public concern widely.
(无懈可击，用词也很地道。这句给3分！)

6号的翻译: Nowadays,the fact that more and more senior citizens has aroused the public concern.
（一上来第一句话就错了，这句话主语是the fact，谓语是arouse，宾语是public concern，fact后面跟同位语从句，而6号的翻译fact后面跟的that more and more senior citizens是一个从句吗？这是很多同学写雅思作文的时候会出现的一种典型病句，即使用同位语从句的时候名词后面跟的不是从句而是名词。这句给0分！）

7号的翻译： Nowadays,the phenomenon of growing numbers of senior citizens has caught everyone's attention.
（正确！不过翻译地没有5号地道，给2分！）

8号的翻译： Nowadays,the fact that there are more and more old people has aroused the public concern
(正确，不过more and more 和 old people这两个词用得稍微有点俗......给1分！)

第二句： 有人认为人口的老龄化是否会给社会带来负面的影响仍未可知

5号的翻译： Someone think it still unclear whether the agedness of population can bring negative effects to society.
（只有1个小问题，can改成will或would更符合这个句子所要表达的意思。2分）

6号的翻译： Some people considered that it is unknown whether the aging of population bring the nagative effect.
（时态混乱！主句的谓语动词consider用一般过去时，宾语从句用的又是一般现在时......0分）

7号的翻译:     Some people think it's still unknown　if the aging of the population will bring negative effects to the society.
（完全正确！3分）

8号的翻译： Somebody think that it is still a mystery whether the population's getting older will take the negetive influence to the society.
（一个问题－somebody是表示“某一个人”的意思吧？1分）

第三句： 也有人认为这个现象带来的只会是一大堆问题。

5号的翻译： While some other ones believe that this phenomenon will bring only more and more problem.
（又出现了很多考生常常出现的一个“经典小错误”－可数名词的单复数问题！这里的problem应该用复数的吧？2分）

6号的翻译： There are also believed that the phenomenon can only take a great deal of problems.
（有there are believed这样一种句型存在吗？还有take是“带走”的意思而不是“带来”哦！0分）

7号的翻译： There are also some people think this phenomenon can only bring a large number of problems.

（这句话太经典啦！－经典的错误......There are also some people后面可以直接跟动词原型think吗？是不是应该把think改成分词thinking呢？记住there be句型there + be + 主语后面不能直接跟动词，只能跟定语从句或分词的结构。1分）

8号的翻译： It's believed by the others that all this phenomenon will bring is just a wealth of troubles.
（终于等到有人意识我出这个句子的意图啦！－是为了帮大家巩固语法课第一单元学的all引导的名词性从句嘛！显然这个句子8号的翻译是最好的！再次提醒：以后看到"......只会......"不要再只会想到only,just啦！3分）

第四句： 从我的观点来看，我认为有必要首先对这个现象可能造成的影响进行分析。

5号的翻译： In my opinion, I deem it necessary that analyze the possible influence firstly which the phenomenon will cause.
(很可惜，出现了又一个典型错误！I deem it necessary后面跟that引导的从句，请问从句有that后面直接跟动词原型的吗？
这里如果在analyze前面加一个we从语法结构上来说就对了。0分)

6号的翻译： In my opinion,I deem that it is necessary to anayse the effect which will be caused at first.
（一个小错误，analyze拼错。2分）

7号的翻译： In my opinion,I think it's necessary to analyse the ifluence that may caused by this phenomenon at first.
（一个小错误，情态动词may后面怎么可能跟过去分词caused呢？应该加一个be吧！1分）

8号的翻译： However, in my view, I think firstly it is essential to analyse the effect which this situation will cause.
（完全正确！3分）

最终得分统计：
5号 7分
6号 2分
7号  7分
8号  8分

雅思翻译练习:同题PK,名师评分

考研 Freekaoyan.com/2008-04-06

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