11 points  
Nowadays, many people choose not be honest in our modern society. We almost can find such things every day of our life: some students cheat in the exam for higher marks; some corporations tell wrong data to the public in order to get more investment; and some doctors
treat their patients with unnecessary and expensive medicines in order to make money, sometimes damaged the patient’s health, even their life.   

Seeing this situation, I think it must be changed. Being honest will benefit not only others, but also ourselves. First, your honesty will make others willing to trust you. Second, being honest can lead you to face your problem bravely, which helps to solve it. And the last, honesty surely helps to make the society more harmony.  

So, I think everyone should start to be honest and everyone should have the idea that our society can not do without honesty.  

这篇文章全部采取正面论述的方法，略显苍白和单调，但文章尚连贯。  

8 points  
In our modern social life, there are many examples around us show many people are cheated. Advertisements cheat people, salesmen cheat people, even one’s closest friends cheat him or her. So many heartbreaks are heard everyday that we cannot help asking: where is our honest exist?  

Everybody is taught honest in the primary school or even in the kindergarten. Honesty does good not onlyto ourseives, but to others as well. If we are honest to others, we will be happier and be in a better mood. Otherwise, we’ll feel guilt at last. To a company and its advertisement, honesty will bring it more consumer and more profit. If we cheat others, friends will not believe you and they will leave you alone. To a company, no consumer will buy your product again!  

So, as the above is said, it pays to be honest. Let’s create a morally outstanding social.  

仅在第一段就有那么多的错误和不规范的表达，其余的就不用说了。好在还能扣题，连贯性也过得去。   
5 points  
With the development of modern economic and industry, competitive is becoming more and more obvious. At the same time, the performance of dishonest is becoming more and more clearly.  

Nowadays, there are many dishonest performance in our society. For example, some people found that he saled goods had past the preservation date. Not throw them away, the revised the preservation date, and saled them again after several day. Another case in the point, a pair of shoes was made from goat. However, in order to